Frodo64

# March 13, 2009 at 4:48 am

Student actively participated in competitions, such as “XYZ” (mathematics competition) and “YXZ” (information technology competition).

This sentence is ok with grammar, is it formal?

ikthius

# March 13, 2009 at 5:23 am

I would say yes…. but I am thinking you mean Student as in student name

James actively participated in competitions, such as “XYZ” (mathematics competition) and “YXZ” (information technology competition).

TheDoc

# March 13, 2009 at 12:51 pm

I don’t particularly like "such as." I would prefer something like "including."

James was an active participant in many competitions, including such formidable challenges like the South West Mathematics Challenge and the Ohio State Technology Finals.

Something like that?