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Please check my grammar

  • Student actively participated in competitions, such as “XYZ” (mathematics competition) and “YXZ” (information technology competition).

    This sentence is ok with grammar, is it formal?
  • I would say yes.... but I am thinking you mean Student as in student name

    James actively participated in competitions, such as “XYZ” (mathematics competition) and “YXZ” (information technology competition).
  • I don't particularly like "such as." I would prefer something like "including."

    James was an active participant in many competitions, including such formidable challenges like the South West Mathematics Challenge and the Ohio State Technology Finals.

    Something like that?